Surprised at the ajar door, he sneaked in post ensuring that the lights were off and everyone was probably asleep,
tip-toeing inside the house not to make any noise,
the lights went on exposing his masked face and the gunny bag on his back
as the crowd hollered out
‘Surprise…. Happy Birthday…’!
Surprise indeed twas.
It’s 55 Fiction over at WriteTribe Festival of Words today.
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I was looking for something different with masked face,gunny bag and tip-toeing but you gave a surprise twist.Well done!!
Remove tht pic yaar.. the pic is a give awa!Only txt will mak eit more interesting i feel
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Did!
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Haha.. good one 🙂 nice.
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AAha !! party 🙂 A nice surprise, that was 🙂
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Hmmm… I wonder who was more surprised. 😀
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Haha…nice!
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What a twist of fate… Loved the plot 😀
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I love surprises, esp on Birthdays! 🙂
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But this was a double surprise right 😉
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you mean people of the house surprised a thief instead of the birthday guy? or was it actually birthday of “he”? 😉
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They surprised the thief 😛
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Ishithaa, It was a good surprise for the ones reading this. A nice one.
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A very nice surprise.
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Short Story….. But Really Nice..
The Way you write.. its just ” So Nice! ” 🙂
Keep It Up.. (Y)
And here we thought! Good one!
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It turned out to be a birthday party…..lovely
What a surprise he got!! Nice one, B 🙂
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WOW, what a twist! I wonder who was more surprised. The robber or the party guests? LOL
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He will think twice before entering an unguarded open door 🙂 surprise indeed 🙂
That was so sweet!! 🙂
Haah… What a surprise !! :):)
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A nice one indeed!
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A beautiful end to thee 55-er:)
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OOH! This was a fun one to read 😀
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