That day in class when I was happily occupying the last bench, absentmindedly composing another poem is still etched vivid in my memory. It was not the first class of our post graduation, but it was the first day you saw me. You walked up to me, in that sky blue shirt and looking charming in the crisp formals that was our uniform those days, and spoke to me. It was not the first time I was hearing your voice, but it was the first time you were speaking to me. Those hazel eyes were a complete heart snatcher, I could not look into your eyes when you spoke as they were too magnetic. I was sure if I did, I’d go clumsy and would mess up in front of you. Still looking at my book, I answered that the seat next to me was not taken, I could feel the warmth of your smile and something stirred in the nape of my neck.
You never were the hunk in the class, not the brightest, not the most charming, not even the sweetest. You were funny. The girls used to love that about you. Wherever you went, you spread smiles for sure. Was that what I saw in you? A happiness that was lacking in my own spirit? Or was it the way you smiled at your mom, that I felt I had to be that object of your love, a thing that you desire.
Sleep had become as rare as rain in the desert, like a rainbow on a hot dry summer afternoon. I was just another shadow lurking in the corners of the classroom, a talent yet undiscovered. Everything changed all of a sudden. Everyone but You in the class began to recognize Me. I was still invisible to you, regardless of whatever I did.
All I craved for was a look or a word; all my attempts to get that from you were turning futile. Love like poison had entered my bloodstream without my knowledge. There was no way I could hold back, now that I had lost my heart and soul to you.
(The second and the final part of this story will be revealed tomorrow. Do come back and read if you liked this.)
That is beautiful. I will be back to read the rest and am now following you. Visiting from the UBC
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Thank you so much Katie.
Thank you Katie. The second part is out… hope you got to read it 🙂
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This excerpt touched me with its raw, basic emotions. Well done.
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Thank you Francene. The second part is out… hope you got to read it 🙂
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Wow that’s really beautiful! I’m looking forward to the second part 🙂
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Thank you 🙂 The second part is out… hope you got to read it 🙂
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This is some serious stuff. I can feel the poison in me, Bhav. Your narration is so beautiful.
Waiting for the next.
Thank you sooo much Preetty girl 🙂
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You sure have a way of grabbing my attention – wonder why you failed with him? 😉 Waiting for the next part now!
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Now you know 😉
Bhavya,
I agree with C, how could he not have seen you. This has to be a fictional story..either that or he was intensely short sighted …
99% of what I write is fiction Dee… 🙂
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love this and waiting for the next part
And now you know what I was talking about na 🙂
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Wow this was beautiful.. will be back for more!
And hopefully I did not disappoint you with the second part…
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You have brought out the sadness and painful pleasures of silent love so evocatively. Loved this, Bhavya. I’ll be back tomorrow.
And yes, good looks and intelligence pale in front of someone who carries good spirits around with him everywhere.
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Thank you dear Cynthia. I am glad I could convey all that she had in her mind
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Oh! Why didnt he notice her?? Waiting for next part, keenly 🙂
Waiting waiting…..
Hope it was not a disappointment Sheethal 🙂
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what kind of eye sight he has??? why doe he not notice you 🙁 … can’t wait for tomm now O_O
And now you know why…he was busy showing off his dimples elsewhere… 😉
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I loved this excerpt and the way your story is progressing. It makes me wonder if he really is so blind to her charms or if perhaps he is so enraptured with her himself that his shyness around her makes him aloof.
Kathy
http://gigglingtruckerswife.blogspot.com
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Maybe because he was trying to employ his charms elsewhere for some other purposes…
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That was beautiful! 🙂
Loved it.. made me smile
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Thank you dear Pixie
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Sensual writing… the pace was quite right but the words chosen to describe the person and emotions evoked were so well employed. Loved it Bhavya. Now will of course wait for the second part and get back to you in here 🙂
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Hee hee… thank you Richa
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Oooh romance! Off to read the next part:)
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Lovely narration. Won’t have to wait for tomorrow to read the next part though… 😛
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Lucky you 😛
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That’s a nice beginning: a girl struggling hard to get the attention of a boy focused on her. Waiting for the remaining part.
The second part is already published Sir.. do read when time permits. Would love your thoughts on the same.
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“Love like poison..” how apt.. it is probably a neurotoxin 😉 😛
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