Thundering Skies
Tall Swaying Coconut Palms
Broken Lonely Heart
PS: This is my first attempt at Haiku, a style I have consciously kept myself away from as I felt that I could never do justice to it. If there are any mistakes, please do point out, I’d love to learn but please be a little kind 😛
This is in response to the WriteTribe Prompt also linking this to the UBC Day 12.
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We all are willing to learn 🙂 I have also attempted my first haiku. Loved yours and the picture too.
Thank you Sulekha 🙂
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55 comments and you doubt? It IS an excellent Haiku! Break the Rules Gurl! Loved it! And the coconut trees says a story that you are from God’s Own Country!
Are you?
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Yep 🙂 you guessed right… and thank you so much for the kind words.
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Greetings from the UBC! I love your haiku. For a first attempt, it is wonderful. The first line has four syllables, instead of five, but I wouldn’t change a thing. I used to shy away from haiku as well, until I had to write one for a poetry challenge. Something in me clicked and now, I love writing them, especially continuous haiku (several haiku grouped together as one poem). Keep writing!
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Thank you Antoinette. I will keep the things you mentioned in mind. Hey, its glad to meet you thanks to the UBC 🙂
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That is a melancholic Haiku Bhavya ! Great attempt.
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Thank you Ruchira. 🙂
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Melancholic is a perfect word. I love the graphic, and the feeling of this haiku.
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Thank you Lorelai, seems that the rains help grow various kinds of emotions in us !!
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Great first attempt… Like like
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Yippeee 😀 😀
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arre why dint u use a pic with coconut palms swaying in rain!
Chumma… 😛 (since its the trendy word these days 😀 )
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For a first attempt, that is very good. So full of imagery.
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Thank you so much Cynthia. Glad that I could at least make a decent attempt.
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very good attempt Bhavya. Heartache and a lonely heart..sigh…
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Thanks a bunch Naina…. Rain speaks differently to different hearts na
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First attempt and it appears to be very good
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Thanks Harsha.
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hey Bhavya
so beautifully read. Now, I need to try at Haiku:)
Yes, you should..
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I liked it a lot
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Thank you so much 🙂
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I love the tropical flavor you have added to this!! Awesome!
And that animation is cool too!
Kathy
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Thanks Kathy 🙂 🙂
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Your photograph complements your haiku really well. I am no expert, but I loved it 🙂
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It is enough for me that the thought behind the composition was conveyed 🙂
I am no expert either Khushboo. But I am happy if it spoke right into your heart 🙂
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Awesome writing! It’s always great to step out and do something you are uncomfortable with! I think you did a GREAT job! 🙂
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Thank you for your kind words Jeff. And yes, life begins when you step out of your comfort zone!
This is a great one, Bhavya..you did it!! I am no expert but please check with Ruchira to see if the first line is 4 syllables or 5?
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Thank you Kajal. Will do that 🙂
Awesome composition.
Thank you Sir…
This is beautiful!:)
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I am glad you think so Tarang!
vow!! so good for a first attempt… wish someday I make an attempt too O_O.. loved it …
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Aww I’m glad you think so SuKu. Why don’t you give it a shot, challenge yourself. I’m sure you can come up with something good 🙂
Hi there, it is good. I also attempted my first haiku for UBC Day 12. please do read and comment. thanks.
Swati, thank you..
Rain often causes us to feel this way – you’ve captured it so well, Bhavya.
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Thank you Corinne.
I was so apprehensive to put this up, that I pestered Meena a lot before actually swallowing the lump in my throat and hit the publish button.
I thought I left a comment … anyway, I love the imagery in this especially the tall swaying palms – palm trees are my favourite as they are so elegant.
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Thank you for the kind words …
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for the first timers like us, attempting a haiku is an oscar thingie 🙂 well well but yours has managed to convey a lot of things through three lines and 17 syllables 🙂
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It definitely is an oscar thingie Richa 🙂
I tried for more than 17 hours before I came up with these 17 syllables I think 😛
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Loved the haiku 🙂
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Thank you
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Some day I am gonna write a Haiku!
And yours is just too good for a first timer 🙂
Hope that some day comes real soon 😉
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Shouldnt it have been a broken skull with all those swaying coconut palms?
Maybe that’s why the lonely heart.. heart misses the head 😀
Love Bhavya. I loved ur Haiku..was just in a mischievous mood 😀
Ha ha ha 😀
The heart definitely misses the head cuz it just got smashed by a coconut from heaven 😛
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I can visualize the pain and the beauty of it.
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Thanks Pree 🙂
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Good one 🙂
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Thankee
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