Haiku #1 – Monsoon

 

Thundering Skies

Tall Swaying Coconut Palms

Broken Lonely Heart

PS: This is my first attempt at Haiku, a style I have consciously kept myself away from as I felt that I could never do justice to it. If there are any mistakes, please do point out, Iรขโ‚ฌโ„ขd love to learn but please be a little kind ๐Ÿ˜›

This is in response to the WriteTribe Prompt also linking this to the UBC Day 12.

57 thoughts on “Haiku #1 – Monsoon

  1. Greetings from the UBC! I love your haiku. For a first attempt, it is wonderful. The first line has four syllables, instead of five, but I wouldn’t change a thing. I used to shy away from haiku as well, until I had to write one for a poetry challenge. Something in me clicked and now, I love writing them, especially continuous haiku (several haiku grouped together as one poem). Keep writing!
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  2. Hi there, it is good. I also attempted my first haiku for UBC Day 12. please do read and comment. thanks.

    • Thank you Corinne.
      I was so apprehensive to put this up, that I pestered Meena a lot before actually swallowing the lump in my throat and hit the publish button.

  3. Shouldnt it have been a broken skull with all those swaying coconut palms?
    Maybe that’s why the lonely heart.. heart misses the head ๐Ÿ˜€
    Love Bhavya. I loved ur Haiku..was just in a mischievous mood ๐Ÿ˜€

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